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Hi Gingerlyme, I am reviewing your story "Dog Days" on the behalf of Game of Thrones here on WDC.

♥ This short story is a sweet one. It is about a little girl named Lisa. Lisa is bored while on Summer vacation. She has no one to play with because her neighbors are on vacation. She feels sad and lonely, but just when Lisa starts to feel sorry for her self - she starts to believe that no one cares about her, her mother tells her to come inside, that she has made a snack for them. This cheers little Lisa up.

♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: The short seems to be well written.

♥ Spelling/Grammar: I did not spot any common grammar or spelling errors.

♥ Overall: This was a sweet poem. It tells the story of just because your alone or feel lonely, like no one cares that there is always someone who does care. Thank you for writing such a sweet story. I look forward to reading more from this author.

Write on!

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