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Hi Jacky, I am reviewing your short story "Lost" on the behalf of Game of Thrones here on WDC.

♥ This short story is about a boy named Dale who is lost in the forest. He has no food, and is in search of the water that he is sure is around, because of the vegetation. He recalls that particular memory from his boy scout days. While, in the forest Dale decides that he is no longer going to fall for the wrong woman, but then he meets the startling gaze of a stranger in the forest.

♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: I did not spot anything worth mentioning. I have no suggestions for you at this time.

♥ Spelling/Grammar: I did not spot any common grammar or spelling errors.

♥ Overall: I enjoyed what you did with the short. I liked that you offer a little backstory on Dale, but I was kinda bummed that we did not get a glimpse as to why Dale became lost in the first place. I also, enjoyed the ending. Thank you so much for writing a good story.

This review was given freely in thanks for a writing that was written freely

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