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 | Final Fling  [13+] Present day human sacrifice to keep the world intact.  |
| (5.0)| Review brought to you by: "Game of Thrones" by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation  OVERALL IMPRESSION - I cannot stop laughing. I was completely caught up in the story, Cynthia's monumental sacrifice waiting for everything to collapse and then you had to go and throw that last little sentence in there. WHAT I LIKED BEST - How you pulled the reader in with this big sacrifice, built the tension as it began to play out and then threw in the humor at the very end. Nicely done! PLOT~ Cynthia is having her last fling of booze, sex and partying. She is ready to sacrifice her life for the rest of mankind and climbs up to the sacrificial stone, lays down exposing her chest. The supreme high Priest raises his dagger, stabs her chest and pulls her beating out. As he raises the still beating heart above his head, everything begins to shake and then collapse. CHARACTER(S)~DESCRIPTION~ Cynthia thinking she's saving the world and offers up her life so that no more Katrina's or tsunamis will occur and cause such destruction. She has lived it up for a week and is prepared for the end to find her. The high priest carries out his duties but is completely shocked when the ground begins to quake and wonders what he has done wrong. DIALOG~ I don't want to give it away here, but that last line of dialog was jaw dropping. Then again so is he. Great job.   
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