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Review by Cadie Laine
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Hello, Cadie here reviewing on behalf of "Game of Thrones

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Overall Impressions~
I read your description and am trying not to understand it. With that in mind I'm not sure if this review is going to be of any use to you. The title caught my attention, I figured that the poem would be about color. Descriptions of some sort of colors we see. Yet your description states that I am not to try and understand this piece, you simply wanted to write it. That's understandable, sometimes our minds need to take us in crazy directions.
This poem is definitely out there in the way that it skips around, there's no one subject that flows throughout the piece. You write about music, then being alone, then wanting to leave to the world you write about, (that I wish I could do at times). Finally you describe being alone in a race when you really need a chance.

This poem is yours, you are the one who ultimately says whether it's good or bad. Just my opinion, I do not care for this poem. My opinion only is not something you need to base what you write on. The reason I do not care for this poem is that it's scattered. If you chose one subject to write about in this poem then it might help me to understand it. It is not my intention to hurt your feelings or offend you from writing. This is just one piece of your writing journey that I have found.

Thank you for sharing, Keep writing.
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