House Florent "Game of Thrones" 

A review for "The Iron Bank of Braavos" 

Hi, Relanka.

My name is Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: The Last Smoke

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with John and William in a trench located in France.

What needs your attention: A typo in this phrase, skin turns read, I suggest changing read to red.

What part I liked best: I like the metaphors and similes used in this story because they are fresh and descriptive. I especially like this metaphor, siphoning the last of its warmth into his damp gloves. I also like the description of William rolling the cigarette, because it described exactly how a smoker rolls a cigarette.

Overall impression: William and John are in a snowy trench in France during World War I. Every few minutes the shot into the darkness in front of the trench hoping to hit an enemy soldier.

The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense. The interaction and conversation between the characters reveals their personalities, friendly relationship, and helps to build the suspense. I enjoyed reading this intriguing, exciting, and well written story. Write on.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .