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 | pretty lady  [E] a poem about how important a woman is from the beginning of her existence  |
| (4.0)| This is your local Simply Positive Reviewer, here! Your writing has been selected for review, as part of Simply Positive's mission to bring more light on Authors here at WDC! First Impressions: I had a distinct idea arrive in my mind as I read this - straight from the very top to the lowest line.... and it came back again and again.... These would make great lyrics!, I thought!!  I liked the pace, the flow is there, the structure simple, almost as simple and vibrant say as a bass and percussion rhythm section. Who knows? Maybe they already ARE lyrics?!  Just the same, I thought highly of this. Usually, when one gets down to the bare bones of most songs, when we study the words involved, even the great songs out there are poetry, only they don't (usually) involve like difficult words or some such obstacles. And that is why I think that when we read this, we take an instant liking to it. It is what it is... Overall Impact: We all remember her. The girl from high school. In my case, she was little in some ways, a full foot shorter than I. But was she ever beautiful!!!!! This poem reminds me of her. I wonder how she is some days. I can only guess... But that is fine, because these lyrics captured those days I had with her, the feelings that I had for her. And that, indeed, is the power of poetry. Simple, positive-minded, respectful, romantic poetry! Errors: One tiny error - at the end. The author writes....: "but you will always be my pretty little lady even when you fully grown." I think we'll change the "you" and write "you're... is my best guess? Summation: As I have written for years, truly successful songwriters know that they don't have to pluck fancy, lengthy words out of dictionaries to get it all down perfectly. What they need is mood. Once that is established, anything is possible. I can say that poetry is music, vice versa, and this proves it. KEEP WRITING! Once again, thank you for providing me the opportunity to read and review for Simply Positive; this also has been written in affiliation with
Yours, "Dr.J"  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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