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 |  | The wind???  [E] It's just a random poem, idk if it can be even considered one  |
| (4.5)| This is your local Simply Positive Reviewer, here! Your writing has been selected for review, as part of Simply Positive's mission to bring more light on Authors here at WDC! First Impressions: Hello, Acton Bell and thank you for allowing me to read and review your awesome, awesome Free Verse poem to date!  I really loved this poem! Wow! It has so many elements that completely blew my mind! It is constructed in such a manner that allows for emphasis to not only be re-stated with each stanza but to reinforce each proceeding stanza along the way.The clarion call of "Beware! Beware!" was of great effect, giving us the notice of grim happenings in a world where a Blood Moon, covered with clouds, allows the reader to spill into a lower valley with the person in the poem, see with their eyes, feel with their muse if you will.... I loved the stanza where the author takes the highly descriptive of "sanguine Moon" and brings us further into the realm of a creature, a monstrous creature at this, and we see that the poetic effect, nearly complete, now has only one final moment of clarity before a very predictable, painful end comes to light...  Overall Impact: So there we have it. In short, there is PATHOS in this poem, utter, sheer PATHOS. It is not imaginary, it is not a child's tale to be told at bedtime, it is a poem that speaks of evil for what it truly is... We know that some kind of PSYCHO-ish being is stalking us, know full well the extent in which such a creature will never end their stalking ways, no matter what. In that light, we take to heart then that while others might feel differently, I will let the ending speak for itself.... Errors: I did spot one place that, while not an error per se, still maybe could use the author's attention: The author writes: " where the large stones lied ' in one line....and I think another way to write this might be - "....where the stones lay" It is a simple declension, then, of tense.... Summation: Golly! Did I ever come across a GEM of a poem, written by a Newbie here on this site!!  Everything told, I certainly hope and wish that this author continue in this endeavor, to shed more poetry upon the great numbers of people here...for did anyone know that Writing.com consists of 1.3+ MILLION writers and reviewers! That is an INCREDIBLY LARGE number of people here on WDC!! Furthermore, with that kind of coverage, it really remains to be see if OTHERS might take a look at this writing, and come away as impressed as I was, and perhaps give it a read before going on their merry way? In short, this was an awesome poem and I hope to see more from this talented, talented author! Was this a poem? Do bears hibernate in the forest?!?   KEEP WRITING!! Once again, thank you for providing me the opportunity to read and review for Simply Positive; this also has been written in affiliation with
Yours, "Dr.J"  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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