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It's been a pleasure to review your story on behalf of Simply Positive Group “"Invalid Item" .

This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.

FIRST IMPRESSION : This is a good start of biographical story.

THE STORY: Early childhood fears, memories and abuses deeply impact us as adults which were highlighted in your story. Like you, all the human has developed the same emotional scars at the time of life. You did a great job putting your feelings into words. It is a good way to write down all thoughts to heal these type of scars.

SETTING :The story is setting in modern time

SUGGESTION A little editing will make your story more interesting.

For example, you wrote

“but i love the word broken more” I should be capitalized with “I”
You wrote “that my home wqasn't broken” spelling should be wasn’t

I think you need to give some descriptions of your childhood so the readers give their suggestions to get rid of them.

Mina~~


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