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 Baalbek  [13+]
Two friends escape the Civil War by playing in the ancient ruins.
by Purple Celebrates
Review of Baalbek  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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"SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

Hello there, Purple Celebrates
This is a Simply Positive Review! *TulipP*


*PirateShip* I am also reviwing your item because I was volunteered as a "Goose," over at "Invalid Item" 

*Monster11* Ah, very interesting take on the official prompt. I did an entry for this contest, also. Thanks to "Game of Thrones"  of course. Yes, and entered it hours before the deadline. *Laugh*

*FlagSt* You did a good job describing the hardships of love amidst the battle torn areas of Lebanon, And using the Ancient ruins as a backdrop.

*Sheriff* The reader could feel the issues faced by the star-crossed lovers. Their love would not, could not be accepted let alone understood, as their political and religious beliefs would frown upon such a union. Frown being a mild word, as death would be the punishment.

Observations:

"Another bomb exploded and Lina flinched. Usually, a stream of sound would proceed [precede] the explosion, but bomb makers were becoming more clever,"

"A sense of dread washed over her. She [sensed?]something was off."

“Well then, we’d better make the most of tonight. Shall we? I want to make it up to the bottom of the pillar tonight from this side if possible." Repeat of the word tonight. Combine the thoughts or replace one repeat or eliminate it, as it is understood it is "tonight."

*UmbrellaR* You know something? Nobody knows better than I or anyone who played during GoT how time restricted we were by the time we got to this choice, the famous #51, Final Cut of HoB&W. You did a fine job with this prompt. I cringe when I think about mine. The deadline came through before I went back to read it ... typos, things that just screem ... "I wrote that?!!!" *Laugh*


Well done, T! *HeartB*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*




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