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 | My Regret: A Widowers Confession  [E] After the death of his beloved wife, the Widower writes a letter of confession.  |
| (4.0)| This is your local Simply Positive Reviewer, here! Your writing has been selected for review, as part of Simply Positive's mission to bring more light on Authors here at WDC! First Impressions: Hello, and thanks for allowing me to read and review your very, very short story entitled: "My Regret: A Widowers Confession" . I must say, after reading through this twice, I thought that certainly, this author has a decent-sixed amount of talent! Raw talent. And, like with all good authors, it is their writing that will either make us all turn the page in anticipation....or not.Problem was, the number of "pages" housing this story was limited to a single page, and truthfully, I wished there was more here. Truthfully and honestly, I think there should be more!  Overall Impact: A huge amount of this writing enables to reader to assume the feelings of guilt that infuses this story nearly from start to finish. I think the author hinges plenty of this raw emotion onto this writing in such a manner as to allow the reader to see "why" this is so. However, I think too that there isn't enough underpinning of reasons for the complete load of guilt to be justified; and I say this as only the reader! Personal experience - losing both my parents to cancer at a very young age - left me with plenty of guilt, so I can see the whys and wherefores of this story fairly well. I know where guilt likes to arrive at. I also know that when parents divorce, children blame it on themselves. It becomes like a death in the family too. But Life is way too complex and too complicated for a single sentence to have caused this much self-loathing. For sure, it was very selfish what the main character said at the death of his wife. Absolutely. But I think the story deserved much more, in order to justify the "guilt trip" too. Just saying. For others who read this, this story might be perfect from their angle.... Errors: There are some grammatical errors that I think - with practice and more writing - will get ironed out in the process here. I am not an English professor, not a teacher. I did spot one line to help underscore my point: The author writes: " A beautiful woman ennie was." First, do know that the previous sentence has the spouse's complete first name - "Sienna". Beautiful choice for a name!  Then it was followed by - "A beautiful woman ennie was." A) I think "ennie" should be capitalized and written "Ennie" ... and... B) - perhaps you could write a single line introduction to her nickname in between those two sentences? The need to capitalize the nickname - and not knowing for a little while where it's genesis arrived from slowed me down. Most readers love a smooth read, yes? Summation: This writer has what it takes to become a wonderful short story creator - and I see this at the very outset!! KEEP ON WRITING!! Once again, thank you for providing me the opportunity to read and review for Simply Positive; this also has been written in affiliation with
Yours, "Dr.J"  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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