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Greetings, clutchhero


This is your local Simply Positive Reviewer, here! Your writing has been selected for review, as part of Simply Positive's mission to bring more light on Authors here at WDC!

First Impressions: Hey there and thanks for allowing me to read and review your brief writing entitled: "Invalid Item" . In all fairness, sometimes when I get around to reading the very brief stories and poems and abstracts here on this site, the authors may/may not mention that this writing that they've put up is part of a contest, et al.

That is perfectly okay, because in many senses of the word, this reviewer has nothing to do with those kinds of things, and I review on the basis of what the author puts in front of me just the same. *Smile*

To wit, I liked this story; it involves taking someone in mind that the author has to date, and realizing that this musician - a rapper named Abstract (Rude) - has much to offer the world.

I checked into the personal webpage of this musician, saw the creds waiting there, and realized that this guy must be on the up-'n-up. (http://www.abstractrude.com/).

Went over to wikpedia, picked up more information to the tune of - (GO HERE:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Abstract_Rude)

But the trouble was... trying to find the Team World Wide designation, which is the entire point of what this author is trying to make altogether!



Overall Impact: The story is more than about a LA rapper and the work he has done: what the author wants ME, the reviewer to know is... the feeling that Abstract deserves a place in the Smithsonian Institute.

Why might that be? Usually, when we get it all together, when someone DOES get into the Smithsonian, its for good and great reason. But a man can dream, can't he?!? *Smile*

I looked up TWW (Team World Wide) and found hits on every conceivable logistic corporation, freight delivery, so on and so forth. Even the Washington Post takes its turn with that acronym.

Then...I found it....Team WorldWide is the group this rapper takes part in, and from there, the author makes it plain that recognition is due here.



Errors: Some. Straight up typos but nothing that obvious. Straight to spellchecker here on this site. No problemo.



Summation: THE one thing I liked most about what is being said here is... the writer wants people...and Writing.com has LOTS of people (1.3 MILLION last I counted) to at least be introduced to someone he places great faith in. I've never heard of a singer seeking to have a place in the Smithsonian, but you know, the author does! The author makes it plain that Abstract has had a really tough life, and can be tougher than Life and how do we know this? Because he survived.

I would make this story far more detailed than this - but it is a start. It is a beginning. The author looks up to this singer and wants those around them to know that a rising star is climbing upwards... and when he arrives, many others will be just as proud.

KEEP WRITING!!!!




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