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Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hi Ghostranch ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.

Happy WDC Anniversary month! I am reviewing your item as part of "Anniversary Reviews"  and as task at "Invalid Item" . I saw that this poem was highlighted in your portfolio and was plugged so decided to take a look at it.

The title of your work was excellent. I kind of reminded me of a trilogy that I have in my reading list but I haven't started it yet. It is called The Clockwork Princess and the rest of the two books are also named Clockwork Prince, Clockwork Angel and the series is called The Infernal Devices. I noticed the similarity between the titles and the genre 'steampunk' and 'romance.'

The addition of the sounds in your poem was a unique idea. The poem itself was extremely unique and when I had finished reading the poem, I was left stunned for a moment as if mourning for the death of the husband and his passing away, the separation of the two lovers. It was very sad. The clock maker fixed his 'wife' only to say her goodbye. It was beautiful and sad at the same time and tore at the reader's heart.

The flow of your poem was perfect, there was no interruption of any sort and the poem did not seem rushed or dragged on. The poem was paced fast with short phrases but it wasn't a bad thing. It made the reader get involved with the poem on a deeper level, engaging with it and fully attentive. The free verse worked well with your poem and there was rhyming in some phrases which added a nice impact on the reader.

The vocabulary you used was very good, it was effective in conveying the emotions to the reader. My favourite lines were the following:

She jumped with a start
and her arms juddered round
to encircle her man
in a grip made of death.

Truly beautiful and really touching. *Heart*

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

Write On!
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