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Review of The Unwritten  
Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Hi Ghostranch ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.

Happy WDC Anniversary month! I am reviewing your item as part of "Anniversary Reviews"  and as task at "Invalid Item" . I was searching for something to review from your portfolio when this poem caught my eye. The title of the poem was excellent and so was the brief description you had provided the reader with. I don't know why but I could feel as if the title said "Unspoken" and the theme that when you want to say something that is hurting you and you can't, tears end up falling. I don't know if you meant to evoke this in the reader but it did anyway.

The entire poem worked in both the ways, with the unspoken words and the unwritten words which was quite impressive. You have shown both the sides of the themes that come to the reader's mind in a very good way. Writer's Block is a nasty thing and I want to write a poem for a contest but I can't seem to think of anything! It's frustrating when you are sitting, looking at the screen in front of you for hours and not getting anything written down.

I loved the terminology and vocabulary you had used in your work, especially the whirlwind, thrash across synapses, swamp, decaying poetry. Being a Biology student, I understood the synapse reference quite well and was impressed to see its use as a word here but it fit well! The flow of your poem was good, there was no interruption. My favourite lines were:

my mind's whirlwind
of tangled worries, .....
of abandoned, decaying poetry.

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

Write On!
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