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 Silver Rose  [13+]
When humans kill a fairy, his wife seeks revenge against the species. Book 1 FINISHED!
by Trisha
Review of Silver Rose  
Review by ~ Aqua ~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi Trisha ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.

Happy WDC Anniversary! *Bigsmile* I am reviewing your work as part of the "Anniversary Reviews" .

Wow - quite a story you have here, Trisha and it is quite interesting too! Fantasy and fairies are one my favourite genres and truth be told, there's only one novel I read which had both of these and I absolutely loved it. It was written and published by a fellow WDC Author.

This story seems full of twists and turns, a daughter without any knowledge of what her mother's upto is on a journey to end the evil and ultimately, against her own mother. There is bound to be a lot of drama! If you want, I accept requests to review novels so feel free to request reviews for your chapters from me anytime.

I had some suggestions for your introduction of the novel. I have pasted your text below and added my personal suggestions and additions in bold, blue text. The punctuation is in the bold, black test.

Serio of the Madid, a Fauyen fairy, scouts the human world to make sure all is well. His last trip ends in tragedy when Serio is murdered by [some of the notorious group of] human bandits. His wife, Kyrin of the Polante-Gnight, vows life for life [and death for death.]. She will wipe humans from the face of the world [forever]. Unknown to her, her only child, Mara, [Mara, Kyrin's only child,] is setting her own wheels into motion. Venturing into the human world to find her mother, Mara unwittingly begins one of the few things that can stop[,] not only Kyrin, but all [the] dark powers in the world.
Thus[,] the adventure begins in Book One of the Silver Rose Trilogy.

It has a lot of premise and captures the reader's attention.

Once again, a very happy WDC Anniversary to you!

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

Write On!
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