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 Flower in the Rain  [E]
My thoughts as I held a Flower in the Rain today
by Trisha
Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Trisha ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.

Happy WDC Anniversary! *Bigsmile* I am reviewing your work as part of the "Anniversary Reviews"  and Twelve Labourers of WDC. I read a poem from your portfolio earlier and chose this one because of the similarity between them. Both of them are in the nature genre and both of them have rain as the main theme, setting in nature in them. So you must love rain as much as I do and feel inspired by that? *Bigsmile*

The title of your poem was very nice, it made me think of a lonely flower getting wet in the rain as the droplets weighed it down and yet it stands still, tall and strong, a sign of survival and strength. It was a good setting to start with and so was the brief description that worked well with the poem you have here and the title.

The flow of your poem was good, there was no interruption for the reader of any sort. It was paced just right, it didn't seem rushed and neither slowed down. The vocabulary you have used in your work is good, casual and exactly what you needed to deliver the images and the emotions to the reader.

You describe beautiful sceneries under the rain in a perfect way which allows the reader to close her eyes and enjoy herself in it. The repetition of the lines 'What could be more beautiful' added a very good impact on the reader and improved the rhythm and flow of the poem.

I had only one suggestion: What could be more beautiful?!?!!

Why don't you remove the question marks and the exclamation marks and have only one of either? It looks untidy and kind of makes the reader pull away from your work from irritation. Other than that, beautiful work! *Heart*

Once again, a very happy WDC Anniversary to you!

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

Write On!
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