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 Sometimes Life is a Walk in the Park  [E]
Be someone's hero!
by jdonne
Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi jdonne ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.

Happy WDC Account anniversary! I am reviewing your work as part of "Anniversary Reviews"  and Twelve Labourers of WDC. I was searching for something to review from your portfolio when this caught my attention with the mysterious and inspiring title you have for your story.

This is a very nice, inspiring narrative that shows that if one of us tries to look outside of the mobile phones and the digital screens and actually interact with people, be humans, it could make a lot of difference and you'd feel satisfied after it. The story made me feel very light, warm and nice on the inside even though it wasn't me who had talked to the old lady and tried to make her feel better.

The idea was excellent and motivating that each of us should try to speak only to lessen others' pain and burdens instead of adding more in them. The only thing you could improve in your narrative is to add dialogues and 'real conversations' to make the story more engaging for the reader.

I have some suggestions for your work. Feel free to discard any if you do not agree.

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This was a really good read, one that I thoroughly enjoyed.

Once again, a very happy WDC anniversary!

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

Write On!
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