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 Softest velvet  [E]
Wrote this while watching my second son sleep as a baby. Dedicated to Kyron.
by Kris Cooper
Review of Softest velvet  
Review by ~ Aqua ~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Kris Cooper ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.

Happy WDC Account anniversary! I am reviewing your work as part of "Anniversary Reviews"  and Twelve Labourers of WDC. I was searching for something to review from your portfolio when this caught my attention, especially when I saw that you had written this about your own son. There was a strange but nice kind of warmth that made the reader feel nice.

The starting stanza was beautiful, it set a very good tone for the rest of the poem as you observed your son and wrote about him. The second stanza was very inspiring and loving and the line 'I look into your eyes and see the whole world as you do' was very beautiful.

A child is a wonderful blessing and everyone should see and spend some time with children every now and then. I am not sure if it is already, but if it isn't, it should be a part of therapy because watching children live as their age, no worries of their own and carefree in their own style. It brings joy to the person who is watching. I noticed that the first time I volunteered at an orphanage and then later taught at a school for underprivileged.

Having one of your own would definitely come with troubles but precious moments like these. A child is everything, the entire world, to his or her mother and you have portrayed that beautifully in your poem in the last two lines of your poem. Amazing!

The flow of your poem was very good, there was no interruption of any sort and my favourite lines were the

Laughter such the world only hears for a short time
Rings from you
“See me, world! I see you!”


Once again, a very happy WDC anniversary!

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

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