I was drawn to the evocative title word and it made me curious. I like the whole idea of using writing to express what may be harder to say aloud. I really enjoyed reading your free flow and the tone of voice as I read aloud.

It was effective the way you lead the reader with your philosophy and then suddenly reveal the truth in the second last line. Brilliant! I felt the jibe there. The varying line lengths and your use of periods was effective for the dramatic flow.
Use of poetic tools like consonance and assonance in your word choice added to a wonderful soundscape. The point of view is vivid and sounded like wisdom from experience. The determined energy is also strong.

Thanks for sharing your vision and craft. The style suited the content and emotion.

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