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 They come back  [13+]
Retribution comes from the inside.
by The bald writer
Review of They come back  
Review by Lonewolf
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hello, I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" . Thanks for entering! It has been a pleasure to read and review your work, please remember any thoughts or suggestions written or implied in my review are based only on my opinion. Thank you for entering and Good Luck!


*Pencil* [Overall Impression]
Interesting take on the Photo Prompt.

*Tools* [Spelling Errors/Grammar]
The only thing I found that could help would be the spacing of the story. It's not one big wall of text, but spacing and maybe font change could definitely help.

*Person* [Character]
The characters chosen for this story are interesting for sure. I felt their interaction was more realistic.

*Pencil* [Ending Thoughts]
I certainly wasn't expecting the ending to be what it was, but I did enjoy the way the prompt was used. I think this has real potential and with the changes I suggested above would be a smoother read. Thank you for entering.


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