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Barren  [18+]
A look at the soul of a bereft man
by Cheri Annemos
Review of Barren  
Review by Lonewolf
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hello, I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" . Thanks for entering! It has been a pleasure to read and review your work, please remember any thoughts or suggestions written or implied in my review are based only on my opinion. Thank you for entering and Good Luck!


*Pencil* [Overall Impression]
Interesting use of the Photo prompt.

*Tools* [Spelling Errors/Grammar]
None that I could find.

*Person* [Character]
Lee came off as an interesting character to say the least. his relationship with his ex Tammy sounds like a grueling one. It's a shame his efforts were in vain.

*Pencil* [Ending Thoughts]
I thought the story itself was pretty good, but I didn't see much connection between the photo prompt and the story. The descriptions were pretty good though. The story tells an uphill battle that I think would be wonderful if expanded on.


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