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Review of The Poster  
Review by Cat Voleur
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions.


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*Bat2*          ALL ALONE :: INTRODUCTION           *Bat1*

"From even the greatest horrors, irony is seldom absent." - H.P. Lovecraft


Hello textual ,

I saw your item "Invalid Item"  was included in the most recent Horror/Scary Newsletter and so I decided to give it a read. I hope that you don't mind me dropping by with my thoughts.





*Bat2*           IN THE DARK :: WHAT I LIKED           *Bat1*
"Terror is the desire to save yourself, but horror is rooted in sympathy." -Joe Hill


*Bats* Concept:


What I really liked about this piece was that it was very unique. It incorporates a lot of classic elements in a new way that offers a certain sense of style all by themselves.

You included a collector, a bunker, zombies, WWII and survival tips which are all things I've seen a lot of, but you really made them your own for this story. It's the way that you tied them together that made it so interesting.

Posters are an interesting collection, the zombie imagery was very understated, and having the survival instructions hung on the wall instead of in a dusty book or pamphlet was a nice change of pace.

This piece had a lot of character worked in, and that's something that I really appreciate.


*Bat2*          SOUND OF SCREAMING :: MY SUGGESTIONS:           *Bat1*
"Horror is the removal of masks." - Robert Bloch


*Bats* Collection


My first suggestion is that you indulge in the narrator's passion just a little bit more. Since this is written in the first person, it's a good idea to write not as yourself, but as your character. The narrator of this piece loves old posters, but I didn't really feel that love.

Elaborating just a little bit on his collection, what inspired his love of old posters, what some of his prize pieces are, etc. could really add a sense of realism to the perspective and depth to him as a character. I think it would help the reader understand what drives him.

*Bats* Final Line


My other suggestion would be to remove the line earlier in the piece that mentions the guide is for getting out of the bunker in 2017. I feel like it detracts from the final line, where the narrator reveals that the year is what caught his attention - since that's information that the reader already has.


*Bat2*           WAKING FROM A NIGHTMARE :: CONCLUSION           *Bat1*
"We make up horrors to help us deal with the real ones." - Stephen King


I hope that this review has been helpful to you. I enjoyed reading the piece and I can see why it was featured in the Horror/Scary newsletter. Congratulations again on that feature. I wish you all the best in working on this and any future stories.

Sincerely,

-Cat

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