INTRODUCTION

Hello Whiskerfaceschoolsout! ,

I actually found your item "Advent Adversity Adventure Day 5"  through the most recent Horror/Scary newsletter, which I thought was a bit strange, but I'm glad to have read your piece all the same. I hope that you don't mind me dropping by to leave you with my thoughts on your writing.

WHAT I LIKED:

Empowering

I like how you were able to write something that captured the tone of conquering ones problems so well. There's a little bit of pondering and uncertainty at the beginning, but by the end you found yourself asking all the right questions and seizing the power that you needed to take the future into your own hands.

Honest

It seems like this came from a very honest place.

I personally don't have this level of faith, so at a face value I had some difficulty relating to the conclusion of the piece. That being said, I was truly impressed by how sincere and strong you are in your spiritual beliefs, and the fact that you're able to pull strength from that made for a great end to the piece. It also added a personal touch to this that made it something memorable and well worth looking over.



I don't really have any suggestions for you on this.

There were one or two small details that gave me pause, things that I might have changed, but then I realized that this was a response to something.

If this was an article or an essay, I'd feel like there'd be a little bit of nitpicking to do, but the way that it's currently written makes it feel all the more like a genuine response.

If I did have one suggestion for you, it would be that you add a small annotation in there explaining the assignment, perhaps with a link to whatever event this is for, just to provide the readers with a little bit more context into what the piece is all about.

CONCLUSION:

I hope that this review has been somewhat helpful to you, even if I didn't make a lot of suggestions on improving it. What I really liked about it was the raw, honest energy that it had and that's something in writing that can't really be taught.

I'm glad to have read your piece and I hope that it was as good to write as it was to read.

Sincerely,

-Cat
















My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .