Hello Pennywise ,

I found your item "The Last Eagles"  thanks to its feature in the most recent edition of the Horror/Scary newsletter. I am a huge lover of the genre so I hope that you don't mind me dropping by to leave you with my thoughts on this piece.






Description:

What sticks out to me most about the piece was your descriptive style of writing and the very vivid imagery.

Some of my favorite lines include:



This is a more simple excerpt, but it captures that morbid confusion quite nicely.

And:



A lot of people will tell you that horror shouldn't rely on gore, but I think you did a good job establishing the atmosphere and tension before moving onto this great line. With the other strong elements of your story in play I think lines like this really just added to the situation and were very effective.

Final Line:

I like the repetition of the word "they" used in the story's conclusion. The short sentences brought focus to the action of the creatures and was a haunting note to end the piece on.




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I don't really have any suggestions for you. For a short piece of horror flash fiction this has just about everything that I'd like to see.

The only thing that I think would be worth drawing your attention to would be the fact the contest link in your annotation is invalid. I like that you included it, it provides some good context, but it might be worth taking a look at if the item is no longer valid.

Other than that I thought the story and presentation were both spot on. Great job!




I hope that you enjoyed my review as much as I enjoyed the story. It was a good piece of writing and I can see why it got its spot in the newsletter. I wish you the best of luck with all of your other writing endeavors and I'd be happy to read more of your work in the future.

Sincerely,

-Cat













My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .