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Hi there, Mic.
This is good for a quick flash fiction piece, although the idea of chewing up a book is somewhat blasphemous in my own opinion. (As a writer I feel books are to be worshiped!). *Bigsmile*
I like how you told this is in the 1st person, and that Biffer should mind his own business. Then again, he had to take the brunt of this inexcusable act, so it wasn't so bad. After all, you wound up curled at Miss Kyla's feet!
Great spelling and telling, but I did spot one tiny niggle:
"I don't know about that(,) Biff?" (I'm also not sure about the question mark...)
Kee ponw ritin gon, Mic, and welcome to WdC, and good luck in the contest!
PS-that dragon you spoke of in your port intro isn't that hard to slay! Trust me!
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