What brought me here
A click on 'Read & Review'. I noticed the request for a review and stopped to take a look.

What kept me here
This was Chapter 2. The author was ambitious. I've been working on a series myself. The fact that Dennis made this a 'Horror/Scary, Action/Adventure' genre peaked my interest even more. I was hooked.

What I liked best
The title for one thing. The current creation date was another. This writer is on top of his game. The title Survival is something we all struggle with. The very word speaks of conflict and continuing resolution only to face more onslaught.

I liked this style. Easy to read small paragraphs with white space between them. A simple thing but appreciated during online reading.

Short chapters are a key to keeping the reader focused while online. We tend to be easily distracted otherwise. Good job.

My favorite sentence was
..which was really odd considering that everything else around bore the marks of a siege...

I felt the impact of this tales conflict. Not only was the main character searching for some answers but a whole group was dealing with something powerful. The following sentences build on the image of unresolved questions. The world around me disappeared and I was in the story connecting with the main character.

A good cliffhanger ending to the chapter. It made me want to read more.

What could be improved
Lead in's from the previous chapter with only a sentence or two would help for those readers joining in late.

A few paragraphs need white space between them for a more professional look.

A closer look revealed the use of unnecessary words here and there which distracted from the flow while reading. Watch using the same word close together. Some words like 'then' aren't needed, especially in an action/adventure. The shorter the sentence the more action is felt. Watch for the use of adverbs. You might benefit by downloading a free copy of Grammarly software. It has taught me so much. I think you'd like it.

Summary
There is a lot going on in this chapter. The scene is set nicely and questions raised that hooked me as a reader. With a little rework, it can rival anything out there on WDC. I'd be happy to review again and hear if you found Grammarly helpful once some quick editing is finished.

If you found this helpful I'd appreciate a review of your own at my "Invalid Item" . Have a day.



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