What brought me here
A click on 'Read & Review'. I hadn't met this author before and thought I'd take a look.

What kept me here
the struggle of imperfect man with a perfect God comes through quickly. This poem is the right way to present a stream of consciousness, open prayer to God. I was hooked from the first lines I read.

What I liked best
Short lines with blank spaces between them drove emotional impact while reading. It made the poem more professional looking.

I'm not enough of a poet to review rhyme structure. From reviews of the few poems I've had looked at, I know it's a good idea to use non-rhyming free-form poetry unless the poet really knows the ABAC's, or whatever poetic structure the poem ends up looking like.

I really liked the way this poem's imagery wrestles with life.

My favorite sentence was
I stray from you because of hurt

I stray from you because of hurt

youre suppose to protect me

when i'm treated like dirt

This really hits both the innocence and expectation of the prayer. Sharing emotion and helping the reader feel it is what writing is all about.

What could be improved
Spelling and grammar errors distracted me from the natural flow of reading. This is a great rough draft. You might benefit by downloading the free version of Grammarly. It's been a great help to me.



Summary
I really liked the theme of this poetry. The conflict was well developed. The resolution seemed very human. I'd like to see the next revision if you decide to edit. Thanks for sharing.

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