Hello JJDel,

I popped over to your profile to return another one of your kind review favors and just realized that technically, you're a newbie here too! So welcome! We're both newbies! :) I love that photo of your nephews. I love my nephews too.

Your "Medic" short story is well written. I didn't see any errors of any kind.

I did have a lot of questions... how old were you/your character (I'll just go with you from here on out to make it easier) when this conversation took place? What exactly is your job? Why is your dad in construction (does he love it? was he born into it? is it all knows to do?)? How old is your dad? How do you lay down your life?

Despite all these questions I thought you did a great job and it's wonderful as is. The questions are just things I'd like to know, if you happened to want to expand the story.

Usually I pick one favorite line but I couldn't decide between these two as they're both fantastic and speak highly of your character: "Because that is who I am as a person and that is what the job sometimes asks of us." I say." and "They need help, some more than others, and I am willing to do what I can."

Ok three... I love the last line too :)

Thank you for an inspiring read!

Write on!
PWheeler

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