Hello RoyWrites,

Welcome to writing.com! As a fellow newbie, I hope you love it here as much as I do!

This is a touching, beautiful love poem that you wrote. I could feel your love for the object of your affection. In just ten lines you managed to express that you care, you will stand by her/him regardless of what the future holds, regardless of what emotions are experienced, regardless of the trials that may come and through the passing of time.

My favorite line was "My love will be with you through it all."

Your grammar and spelling are spot on.

If you'd like a wee bit of constructive criticism, read on. If not, just stop here and know that I enjoyed your emotional love poem. If you do read on, know that, as with any review I make, I only intend to be helpful and have no expectations. Meaning, as any reasonable reviewer probably suggests, you can take my suggestion or ignore it as best serves you and your poem.

It's really just one little thing... the message of the last two lines is wonderful but, unlike the rest of the poem, it doesn't really rhyme. I double checked here: https://www.rhymezone.com/r/rhyme.cgi?Word=thin&typeofrhyme=perfect&org1=syl&org... and figured I'd share the link because it's very handy when writing rhyming poetry.

Now, that's just my suggestion. And the poem really is beautiful as is. In fact, it's so beautiful that I'm still going to give it a 5 star rating

Welcome to writing.com!

I wish you all the best!
Phoenix

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