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 Missed Opportunity  [E]
Opportunity eludes the hesitant soul
by freedom and nature
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi!

It's been a pleasure to review your story "Missed Opportunity"  on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" 

First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.

*BurstP* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a good story. Wonderfully told with third person. I especially liked the way you tell your story.

*BurstP* THE STORY: This is a story of a man Ryan who was too shy to find a soul mate.
Ryan was walking alone at the seashore enjoying the natural beauty. But he very much desired to experience this enchanted scene with a loved one. You have a good imagination. I like the thought “How would it feel to combine nature' s tranquilizing power and her serene presence?” your story tells that a hesitation is a missed opportunity.

*BurstP* DIALOGUES: Though there is no dialogue but it floated beautifully. I like the presentation.

*BurstP* CHARACTERS: All the characters are well developed. I especially liked the character “Ryan”. You crafted him so beautifully.

*BurstP* SUGGESTION: I didn'find any mistake.

*BurstP* FINAL THOUGHT: you are a good storyteller. I appreciate the way you are telling this story.

I can’t wait to read another story from you. I enjoyed it reading.

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