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This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting to you.

*BurstP* FIRST IMPRESSION: It sounds like a good recipe for meat lovers. Your title “Daddy's Hardcore Spaghetti “ has caught my eye. I especially like the chatty style of your writing.

*BurstP* Ingredients and measurements: I often buy new cookbooks and try to make dishes. Sometimes I just read them.
You wrote the first main section list of ingredients and measurements beautifully. It’s easy to read.

*BurstP* The Method: I found that you written it with paragraph style. I like the recipe written with bullet points. I think you can put them in bullet-point form.

*BurstP* Photo: You can insert a photo of this recipe. You can use writing ML to make it more interesting and easy follow.

*BurstP* Favorite part:“Do not be afraid of going overboard with an ingredient. My rule for this recipe is the more the merrier, cooking shouldn't involve mathematics only a rocket scientist would know.”

*BurstP* FINAL THOUGHT: You are a good storyteller. I appreciate the way you wrote this.

I enjoyed it reading. Thank you for sharing.

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