Hello Perhaps,

I enjoyed your poem. It felt like a philosophical pondering.

My favorite part was the last stanza:
"And when you see your blindness
You will awaken with your eyes
open in the darkness"

You offer a lot to think about in this poem. Usually I recommend that people don't repeat words, but in this poem's case it adds to the philosophical feel and is part of the art. Cleverly done.

You might consider entering the Philosophical Musings contest sometime, if you're into contests. Here's the link, just in case you're interested: https://www.writing.com/main/forums/item_id/2137339-Philosophical-Musings

Did you mean for the title to be "Insert Title Here"? or was that the default when you don't make one? Either way, I'd definitely recommend putting in a title that more accurately reflects the poem's content. It might get you more reviews too.

I found your poem in the "Please Review" area of writing.com.

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler

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