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 |  | Santa's Surprise  [13+] First Place Distorted Minds Contest December 2016  |
| (4.5)| THIS REVIEW IS JUST FOR YOU. SAFE TRAVELS & MANY BLESSINGS    I am reviewing your work as a "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" family member, on behalf of The WDC Army Angels (I'm not certain when I started this review, however I fully intend to complete it for you.)  WHY I'M REVIEWING FOR YOU  Group/purpose: This gift is just for you so you can write with might and gift delight to readers through out WDC with confidence and best ability! Title: Santa's Surprise wandering through the Distorted Minds Contest I discovered this story with it's inviting title that I needed to investigate to find out "what surprise?" Description: First Place Distorted Minds Contest December 2016 I'm glad I found your story because I enjoyed reading it and learning more about writing. Congratulations or your First Place win.  FIRST IMPRESSIONS  I LIKE What and why: plot: The opening paragraph seemed innocent enough and much of the rest of the story went along with apparent innocence, however the very best part was the last line about the little girl slitting Santa's throat. As I read the story I eventually, about half way through it, figured out that Santa was the boy friend. Then I began wondering what the little girl had in mind for preventing Santa from having relations with her mother. Rhythm: The pace of the story went well from my point of view. It moved along smoothly and was enjoyable to read. As I was taking in each word I could visualize the events. Towards the end, I started to get a bit ants about how things would turn out but patiently read each word and took in all the visuals and content you applied to this great story.  OBSERVATION(S)  QUESTION(S) How did you create this treasure? The way your word art was presented displayed living color of all the events as if I were watching a movie. I really enjoyed having the events unfold in living color and character.  SUGGESTIONS AND COMMENTS: My thoughts and ideas which may be of interest to you: "Well"Audra answered "Well" Audra answered I believe there should be a space between Audra's "well" and the rest of the sentence.  CONCLUSION(S) My thoughts and Impressions: I hope you will continue to be active on WDC. Please continue to write and share your word art. Safe travels and many blessing.  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  You are being reviewed by "Reviewing Reviewers ~ ON HIATUS" [E]! Feel free to check us out to find out our purpose on Writing.Com. My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" The WDC Army Angels  Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 03/06/2018 @ 8:56pm EST