Hello

My name is Mastiff and I'll be reviewing your piece. These are just my thoughts and forgive me if I ramble, and realize I make just as many mistakes as anyone else. Thank you for sharing your writing.

Title: It's nice. I kind of like the one word effect. The sub-title gave me more, but I'd have taken a look anyway.

Initial Reaction: It reminded me of the scene from King's Misery and her talk about the change of seasons. At that point I kind of wanted to know where you were taking me.

Setting: You set the scene very well, even though we have no idea where we might be on the globe. In a short story, you certainly made me feel cold.

Character Development: We get to know Marla, and I believe that's the point. You could have done more with her, but you had a word boundary on the piece.

Plot: Short and sweet. We get the twist for certain.

Ending: I suppose we'll just have to wonder why they're out there in the first place, as it seems she's fond of them in the fourth paragraph.

Line-by-line and Suggestions: Maybe check some commas and be careful ending a sentence using "with." Overall, not bad.



Happy Writing!

Mastiff