Hello Inkslinger



Disclaimer:
These are only my opinions. Feel free to use what you find helpful and disregard the rest

Starting with the beginning, the title is great. It's catchy and pulls the reader in. The first couple of lines hooked me into your story. The plot moves at a good pace. Good story line. You kept me turning the page great job.

Good description of the settings used. Some details about Mr. Samuelson would help the story, also maybe a flaw. Make the main character more real. Great ending. I didn't see it coming. And you left it open, leaving the reader wanting more.

One suggestion would be to add a space between paragraphs. I read some of the lines twice.

I enjoyed reading your story.

Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.


Gypsy Ann

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .