Hello Genipher,

I saw your post in the "Please Review" forum and of course wanted to review your poem.

Your poem is great and evoked the emotions I think you intended. Your spiritual questions ring true and I suspect they are shared by many people.

Your ending is powerful and at the same time feels like a tribute to Robert Frost.

Because I'm on a personal journey to a clutter free life, my favorite line was: "well, what good is all that wealth?" Great question.

You mentioned punctuation as your greatest concern but I don't see that as an issue with this poem (the line breaks serve as your commas and periods). However, I do think it'd be easier on the reader if you either capitalized new sentences or broke it into some stanzas. That's all optional with free verse poetry, of course. It's a personal preference thing, not a rule. So, just my opinion.

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler

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