Hello Adele,

Welcome to writing.com!

I enjoyed reading your colorful poem.

My favorite line was the first: "In a pink sky we wish we could fly" ... I liked both the internal rhyme and the imagery of it. Plus, I love pink :)

You created a beautiful poem that leaves the reader with food for thought.

In the spirit of helpfulness, I do have a couple suggestions to improve your lovely poem. If you'd like constructive criticism, please read on. If not, just know that I enjoyed it and stop here.

In this sentence: "Peace and light always shines around the small birds" I believe "shines" should be "shine" because together, peace and light are plural.

In this sentence, I think I understand what you're asking but it's kind of confusing as is. Perhaps it would be less so if there were quotation marks around the question? And, I think, "is" should be "are" because rainbows is plural. "Why we ask is there not more rainbows to dance to" ... but I LOVE the idea of dancing to rainbows. That is very well done.

Thank you for sharing your emotional poem!

Happy writing!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler

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