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Title:
Protocol 111
Description:
Two space miners find that humans are not alone.
         *Bell* FIRST IMPRESSIONS *Bell*

         *ThumbsUp* I LIKE *ThumbsUp*
What and why:
The way the suspense was strategically built up and finally the release of it when the surprise of an alien ship was discovered. Also the flow of events mingled with conversation for me when well and was much like real life happenings. The story in general kept my attention and I was able to in my minds eye see the events.

plot:
This word art had en interesting story line which although it was similar to others had the unique approach and voice of the author. The way it was revealed with slow build up to the final discovery made for an interesting true life scene with interesting characters.

Rhythm:
There were a few places where things seemed to be hum drum but this made the more exciting parts stand out. The slower explanations although giving information about the characters and their environment, these added to the story imagery and gave background information which helped show who these miners were and tell about their histories, hopes, and dreams.

         *Binoculars* OBSERVATION(S) *Binoculars*

         *Question* QUESTION(S) *Question*

         *InfoV* SUGGESTIONS AND COMMENTS: *InfoV*

My thoughts and ideas which may be of interest to you:
         
It hurtled through space with eons passing like the second hand on a watch. Although "it" is ok, have you considered using something like, "the object" or an unknows element, or perhaps A space unknown, something rather than "it"? Seems to me this would add some spice/interest to the story.

There are some typos. When you read aloud this can help with finding places where the sentences may need some tweaking or the story could use additions or subtractions.

*Thought* CONCLUSION(S) *Thought*

My thoughts and Impressions:
I liked the story very much because it brings into focus the lives of people trying to handle they lives to their best ability. Space stuff can be interesting and educational. Mystery is the spice which gives the reader the need to keep reading.

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