Hello

My name is Mastiff and I'll be reviewing your piece. These are just my thoughts and forgive me if I ramble, and realize I make just as many mistakes as anyone else. Thank you for sharing your writing.

Title: It really didn't give any indication about the story, which is fine, of course. However, now you'll make me curious as to what it means!

Initial Reaction: I sensed someone wasn't having any fun. How deep that would go was my first thought on the piece.

Setting: Very well done. You set that it up in a way that anyone who has been out in the woods or near a reservoir can picture it.

Character Development: I could have used just a bit more of him, but since it was her perspective almost throughout, it's understandably. Looks like a word count was also in play.

Plot: Well, you give us enough to draw our own conclusions.

Ending: In particular, enough to draw a conclusion of what you meant in your title. So, you tied it back well. Good job!

Line-by-line and Suggestions:
Para 1 Ln 2: I doubt you meant his mouth was indolent. You can use another comma or place it elsewhere in the sentence.
Para 4 Ln 1: I might have used "walk" or similar, instead of "went." Just a personal thought.
Para 5 Ln 3: Looks to be the only possessive in the story. "Ballroom of the moon" would leave you with none. Again, just a personal thing. :)

Overall: I enjoyed it, and found it quite well written. Keep it up!

Happy Writing!

Mastiff