Hello Quantra,

Welcome to writing.com!

I saw your poem in the "Read a Newbie" section.

You crafted a deeply emotional, romantic, relationship poem. I'm sure your wife will be honored to receive it.

Your poem made me feel happy that you have found such love.

My favorite line was:
"A thousand lifetimes and I'll choose you" and that will surely make your wife's heart melt.

In the spirit of helpfulness, my best suggestion is to reconsider the "Through you, Through you" refrain... it doesn't really add to the poem and isn't powerful enough, in my opinion, to be repeated so much. "You make me alive" or the whole thing from the beginning "through you, I found a hope" might be better. Or you could just leave out all the repeating. Now, that's just my opinion. Your poem is wonderful. That's just my thought on making it even better.

Thank you for sharing your poem! Write on!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler

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