I was down to the last couple of sentences in the review and the whole thing disappeared.

I felt this would have been better in first person. None of my births happened like this so it didn't pull me in or grab me as I would like.
Then I got to the ending. I have to admit, you judged me and every other reader very harshly. How do you know I would not thank her? How do you know I would not thank God for her kindness and compassion? If you are going to write to 'me' as in 'you' 'you' 'you', then be careful of laying judgment on your readers.

Contractions are mostly in the abdomen, and maybe lower back. Babies are not in stomachs. The fetal monitor is not over the stomach either, it's up on the swollen belly where the baby is.

This had some good reading to it. I was put off with the judgment call. There are a lot of loving, caring people out there that would be offended.

The toddler mostly likely would not have lain there. Most of that age would be wandering around, crying or worse.

There are meds that would not make her pass out. I've asked in Newsfeed before for help on something where I needed medical info. We do have medical people here. lol

I hope some of my suggestions will be of help. There is good stuff there. What if you started with something from the husbands viewpoint? 'My wife came home and told me...' Just something to think about.
Thanks for the read.
Love, LinnAnn