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| (4.5)| k  Hello Lisa Noe  This is a review on behalf of "Angel Review Forum" [ASR]n This is a cute little children's poem. One I know would bring a smile to all children who read it, or who it is being read to.   Title and Description - The title is short and easy. One which would definitely pull children in to want to read the piece. The cute little image is adorable and fits the title perfectly. It's nice that you let the reader know what drove you to write this poem and that you won the contest! Congratulations   Characters - You do a good job in letting the reader get to know your characters.  Setting - The scenes are painted well with your words where the reader can easily visualize each stanza.  What I like about your piece - The whole cheerful undertone of your writing and one which kids will definitely enjoy. Suggestions - My only suggestion is for the last stanza. It seemed a little less smooth than the other stanzas and it tripped me up a few times. I think you could end the first line at full and find another word to end the next line in a rhyme ... maybe cool? Just a suggestion -- please take it or leave it as you see fit.   Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us! KEEP ON WRITING ON!  Tracey~~Image #1188311 Sharing Restricted~~  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 03/26/2018 @ 12:02am EDT