response to what sound -to what sounds.doubt who that 'others' was--I would put either 'that person, or those others'

There were very few suggestions to be made. This was very well written. I have a feeling you must be a mystery writer. lol You left me hanging with the intro to another character, a potentially violent one at that.

I was not paying attention to the boundaries of the rules of the contest. My review was based solely on the merits of your writing.

It started off well, grabbed my attention right away, and held it. This was very realistic and believable. Good job. You might want to think about turning this into novel. I think it would be great.

Thanks so much for sharing this with us.