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  |  | a Dream deferred  [18+] In the blink of an eye, everything changed.  |
| (4.5)| THIS REVIEW IS JUST FOR YOU. SAFE TRAVELS & MANY BLESSINGS   I am reviewing your work as a "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" family member, on behalf of The WDC Army Angels  WHY I'M REVIEWING FOR YOU  Group/purpose: This gift is just for you so you can write with might and gift delight to readers through out WDC with confidence and best ability! Title: A Dream Deferred Description: In the blink of an eye, everything changed.  FIRST IMPRESSIONS  I LIKE What and why: The ending seemed to have a bitter/sweet out come even though there was a huge loss. But the although fa=ragel human spirit may be faced with overwhelming obstacles there still is hope and the ability to conquer and thrive. plot: This is a complicated plot because of so many years involved and the changes in government policies as administrations change. The toll it takes on the people is also complicated because of the many different people involved in the immigration and deportation process. Another part of this is the individuals and their personal circumstances, yet all laws and all people must be treated the same. All of these factors and environmental factors make this an extremely detailed and interesting story. Rhythm: I very much enjoyed reading this story. The beginning seemed to drop right on me, which gave me an idea of the shock experienced when suddenly after many, many years of living in the United States, a person is doing what is required after leaving work and then finds themselves in prison awaiting deportation. The rest of the story had enough details and character interest to keep me reading. For me ti moved along at a nice pace.  OBSERVATION(S)  QUESTION(S)  SUGGESTIONS AND COMMENTS: My thoughts and ideas which may be of interest to you: oid) – until 11:30 P.M. when it’s officially lunch time. Lunch at almost 12 midnight? when you watch a lot of movies, television, documentaries, and ? books that detail read books not watch them, perhaps? flu, the week before all went downhill it should been an ominous sign. have felt like an enormous burden ? being placed on my shoulders. was and I was brought right after high-school graduation to assist. Right after high-school graduation, I was brought to the United States to assist. Or ... to assist my sister. Ideas which for me smooth out the sentence and make things clear.  CONCLUSION(S) My thoughts and Impressions: I'm vert glad you wrote this story and shared it with readers and reviewers. It was a pleasure to be allowed to review for you. Safe travels and many blessings.  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  You are being reviewed by "Reviewing Reviewers ~ ON HIATUS" [E]! Feel free to check us out to find out our purpose on Writing.Com. My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" The WDC Army Angels  Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 03/28/2018 @ 2:57pm EDT