My first suggestion is to edit, recopy this from it's original and when posting it, click on where to 'keep format' and then save edit. At least that is what I think is the way.

Some of the punctuation confuses me. What is in your head is what counts. I pause at the commas and it doesn't quite flow for me that way. But again, I am only one part of this equation.

defiant awe rises-why would one want to defy their awe?

Sun beams bright, walk along the wall--I really liked this part.

young love lust -I think a comma between love an lust is needed.

the non-sense-no dash, nonsense is one word.

Sun and stars shone, you radiant most immense-I'd put a period after 'shone'/. and a comma after 'you' Sun and stars shone. You, radiant most immense.

I'm not familiar with Athene, but I am familiar with Athena. Is that who you meant?

under spell? What about under a spell, you your spell?

Your first and second verses are abab
your third verse is abbb.
your fourth is aba and only three lines, not four.
These are some things you may want to think about.
Thanks for sharing with us.
love, LinnAnn