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Review by Mina~
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It's been a pleasure to review your story "Invalid Item"  on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army"  for April review Challenge.

First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.

*BurstP* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a good thoughtful poem.

*BurstP* THE POEM: I like this poem because it is rich in words. This poem has a very good message. The concept is unique. Your words are very pure and true that today can turn into tomorrow and yesterday can never be today.

Your poem reminds me one of song of Bob Dylan Yesterday's just a memory, tomorrow is never what it's supposed to be. Because ne never know what tomorrow brings.

*BurstP* SUGGESTION: I think you need to remove the extra spaces between the lines “today.” And “There is always tomorrow.” Otherwise it is a thoughtful poem. It packed with message.

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