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Review by Mina~
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello Humming Bird!

It's been a pleasure to review your story "Invalid Item"  on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" 

*BurstP* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a good story. Wonderfully told. I especially liked the way you tell your story.

*BurstP* THE STORY: This is a tale of a surgeon Sufia who love to communicate with the departed souls.

I like the story behind a story. Your presentation are vivid and artistic. Second, I loved the poems you have added here for example Above the sky, Beyond the sea, Wherever you are, Please come to me. You give a good character description Her light brown eyes were fixed on a long, mud-stained bone imprisoned in her strong fist.

*BurstP* DIALOGUES: Their dialogue flowed beautifully between the characters “Tuhin “ “Sufia” and “Tania” is believable.

*BurstP* CHARACTERS: All the characters are well developed. I especially liked the character “Sufia”. You crafted her so beautifully.

*BurstP* SUGGESTION: I think in some places you need to add a little descriptions. I learned that a story without enough description is missing something. Description gives your story the life it needs. So, I think in some places you need to give some descriptions.

*BurstP* FINAL THOUGHT: you are a good storyteller. I appreciate the way you are telling this story.

Thank you for sharing your story. Happy Birthday!

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