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 The Foot Soldiers’ Battle  [13+]
A thought-provoking look from the foot soldiers' view.
by Harry
Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*Balloong* Happy Poetry Month Harry!

*Heart*I appreciate this tribute to the foot soldier as indeed they carry the day in every battle I ever studied in history. Your understanding of their bravery, queries and duty to what has to be done for a greater cause, even without knowing if it will really help, is well shown in your poem.

*Badge* Details are vivid and I can hear the echo of how a soldier might feel. The line about "who decides who dies" is potent and the questions at the end echo through time I am sure. We are wondering still! The tone is haunting.

*Lightning2* The quatrains are well composed with a vibrant pictures and effective rhymes that assist the flow as I read aloud. Although not all lines followed a strict syllable pattern, I was not thrown out of the flow and in fact, it added interest to the piece.
The first verses were much shorter though. Was that intentional? It added a speed or perhaps anticipation.

The vocabulary choice was in keeping with the theme and references to STyx and Mankind added to the notion of how long "war" has been a norm. I liked the use of the word "shelves" as a verb. The image is unique to consider. Effective use of assonance and consonance made for a pleasant soundscape and cohesive flow. *Star*

Keeping the present tense throughout is a fine feat and kept the emotional connection immediate. *Thumbsup*

I admire the creativity and fine detail in this long poem. It kept my attention and evoked an appreciation of the foot soldiers. Thanks for giving them a tribute. *Starstruck*

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