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*Balloonp* HI CJ! Welcome to WDC and thanks for entering into a contest! Way to go!

Oh wow! This Blink entry is too creepy and you left me hanging as to what is in the bed. You certainly evoked a response and struck at my imagination!! Good job!

The short dialogue set up the story line and setting well. And the last words... leave me wondering if she would have moved. The periods at the end were effective for shock and drama!

I noticed a few typos... "Replied" does not need a capital letter and either does "Having" as the phrase follows from replied. Just put a comma after "replied".
Also, I think "get stuck" should be past tense to go with the rest of the story. "got". Could be a typo too.

You really captured this scarey piece in so few words! Keep on writing. *Starstruck*

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