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 The Stoning  [18+]
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Review of The Stoning  
Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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*Delight* Happy Poetry Month! *Flowerb*

What an interesting and historic theme for a poem. Good choice. I like the first person voice as the woman being stoned tells what happened with a confusion and query as to reason for such a brutal punishment. The picture you paint is vivid. *Thumbsup*

The free style suits the theme and emotional content and the repetition of the word "stone" gives it emphasis. I see you are using the present tense, which gives us a bird's eye view. I would check out verse 3 as you change to past tense. *Wink* A quick read will show where the tenses are off.

I think lines one and two in verse two say the same thing. And the second line is passive tense...I would try for consistency of active tense.

This is a sad event and one which has taken place many times in history. It must take a lot though to pick up a rock and heave it at someone.

Thanks for following your muse and sharing this stony hearted vision. *Star*

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