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This is beautiful poem. The poem Long-Traveled Rain tells the story of rain who traveled the world and share its experience with the poet. I like the enchanting picture the poet have painted here. It reminds me the monsoon rain in my country. Today it is raining here, I could hear the booming sound of clouds from my home. And this is perfect poem for this day. I like the rainy day because rainy day images gives me inspiration, it renewed our hopes.

I found this poem is condensed structure. “velvet ground “worms “frogs” “logs” “bugs” all the natural things blended together creates a beautiful rainy day picture. The tone of the poem is filled with hope, I especially like the last stanza

“Breathing in I now smell the coming rain,
and inhale earth's life into my core,
the weary rain that rests upon my face,
long-traveled, now visits me once more.”

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